Sunday, August 3, 2008

Little Boy Part 3:Exodus

It's raining.
At least that is what
Little Boy think is happening.
Woe betide.

Yes,
thinking,musing
contemplating.
Little Boy has finally found a conclusion:
Time is a Devil.

Time flies past so fast
when you are basking in warm moments.
Time crawls like a prisoner binded with shackles
when you are drowning in grief.
Time is indeed evil.
It cackles at us,mortals.
That is what
Little Boy thinks.

He sums up his new aphorism:
Friends make a Man
or break Him.

On the flat,cold rock
Little Boy sits,haggard.
He likes to think
that he is missed,yearned.
He gazes up to the vast dark sky
blinking away the raindrops,
searching for a message bird,
hoping it would deliver him
a letter, a note,
anything.
he waits in vain.

The clouds part,laughing.
The night sky is unveiled,winking.
Still,not a single life form is seen.
Little Boy has run out of tears.
He rises,
his hands outstreched,eyes shut.
He listens to the whispers of the wind
straining to catch some faint murmur.
He is dreaming. Again.

Faint,unsteady footsteps.
Little Boy turns to see
Old Man hobbling towards him.
Little Boy stares,
Old Man smiles.

'So Little Boy,have you enjoyed your little trip to the Dark Realm?'

'I cannot go any further,i have not the will, nor the have the strength to go back.'

Old Man smiles ruefully
'Things can always be mended'

Little Boy recites his new aphorism to Old Man.
Old Man remains silent for a while,
then shakes his ancient head.

'What do you intend to do now?'

'What am i supposed to do?'

'What do you want now?'

'What do i want?'
Little Boy feels the old
misery rising like a tide.
He remembers vividly his dancing days
and most of allhis dancing friends...
friends...

'I want to go back,
but before that,
I want the courage to say,to speak
I want a chance
I want to stop all this self-brought grief
I want to make things right again.
Is that too much to ask?'

Then suddenly,
a dark blue raven,
perched on the spot
where the Old Man was standing,appeared.
It turned its handsome head,
and nodded,
perceptively.
It spreaded its wings
and took flight.

Little Boy watched it go,
at long last,smiling.
He knew,somehow,
the raven will bring
his heart to his friend.

Something snapped within him.
Little Boy stood,
and took a step,
not forward,but backward.
A step,a shuffle,a jog,a sprint

Little Boy,screaming his heart out,
finally begins his long run
back home.

4 comments:

Goh Ji Hang (Henri) said...

Holy shit dude you've actually got me crying der man! XD Great story telling! The personality and the inner mind of the Little Boy are well presented, I can actually feel how he felt!

So I presume this "Little Boy" is based on you, so who is this "Old Man" then hmm? *kepoh* :P

BTW dun mind if I post de part 1 on my blog? I think this is worth sharing out man =D You should seriously consider writing short stories or even song lyrics man!

Victor Goh said...

haha thx. go ahead.

Alicia Loi said...

Hihi, alicia here (ji hang's gf),well i found ur blogs (this 1 and ur main 1) through ji hang's blog. so i suppose u're trying to convey ur feelings in short stories/poems?

I use to write poems/ short stories myself for the school mag or local competitions, and in my opinion, ur story about the Little Boy is really good!

However, in part 3, the story took an unexpected twist, as he suddenly decided to turn back with no obvious reason. in part 2, u built him as a character feeling deep pain n sorrow, forgetting the old man's words, going deeper n deeper into the darkness, i just thought it should have a better option if he experienced some kindness or something be4 he turned back towards the light. ;D

Just my opinion though! ur story could seriously become a long 1 if u develop him more in the 2nd n 3rd part! i love the 1st part, it's really well written, 2nd part is a bit repetitive.

i think we all see bits of little boy in ourselves once in a while when things doesnt go well for us.
keep up the good work, man! u have talent in this!

Victor Goh said...

Haha thx for the comments. Appreciate em.

yea, 2nd part was actually just to emphasize on his pain.

3rd was kinda rushed, i'd probably re-do it if i get inspiration. so yea. haha