Rain was just doing his job,
Wind was just fooling around,
Cloud was just passing by,
bossing Rain around.
All that,
Sun was left behind,
shrouded by loneliness.
He kept his rays to himself.
Then the Hand that Wrote all Creation,
strolled about,
and saw Sun sulking alone.
'Well my dear Sun,why have you kept your rays to yourself?'
'I'm not allowed to play with Rain,Cloud or Wind,
They say if i come along,
i'd disrupt their fun.'
'You do not know if that is true,
neither do they.
Your rays are more important than you think'
Sun decided.
So,
out he came,
dazzling and blinding,
warm and fiery,
His rays parted all that was about him,
gently.
Rain stopped,resting a while,
Cloud parted,for he was shy,
and Wind turned to Breeze,his brother.
Sun shone.
All was well.
This particular piece, although not my best, is dedicated to someone whom i truly treasure. May you find good fortune where ever you may fare.
I just got hit by inspiration. So, for those of you who visit this blog(thank you) , please be patient as i need to get the plot of my new story right.
A little hint: it's a love story. bwahaha. Predictable, i know.
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hello! alicia here(again)
another good piece of literature! this was really an impressive piece with extensive use of personification of the sun, wind, cloud and rain. they had human feelings but not to a point where it becomes so complicated, u'll think they are humans, hahaha. actually if u dont understand me, haha, what i mean is u did not over-express their character as humans. it was kept brief, simple and yet meaningful.
i had 1 question though, when the sun came out, didnt cloud n rain move out of the picture? it wouldnt be exactly true that they were all having fun. hmm...thinks hard..
anyways, it was a good poem, short but interesting. wow, u might have some hidden in this writing stuff, hahaha, looking forward for ur next piece. cheers!
HAHA thank you soooo much for your comment/advice. It's nice to know that i have a fan. AHHA. please pass my blog around.
Next piece,erm...need to wait la. I'm not sure if i can finish it, i mean, my SPM trials are coming, so yea, studies first.
victorrrr..
very simple, short and sweet =P were you planning to continue it?
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